The random witterings of Jonathan Morris, writer.

Wednesday, 27 February 2019

Walk Like An Egyptian

And now, the revised version of Jago and Litefoot: The Claws of the Scarab. As you will read, I completely changed the nature of the villains of the story. Is it better or worse? I don’t know. It still got rejected!

This version has all the changed bits in red, which is a thing that I do to be helpful to producers, so they don’t have to read the whole thing again.


JAGO & LITEFOOT

 THE CLAWS OF THE SCARAB”

Our heroes and Ellie attend an opening of a newly-found sarcophagus at the British Museum Archaeologist Randall Brooks Morton – a colleague of Flinders Petrie – is there with his fiancĂ©e Constance Drake. The sarcophagus is of a long-dead Egyptian Queen, Aret-Hanutma. As the mummy is unwrapped, it momentarily seems to spring to life, gasping for air. Constance faints of revulsion/shock. The mummy is clasping an amulet in the shape of a beetle.

After the evening’s end, Constance is taken home by Ellie while Litefoot examines the mummy, in his capacity as a pathologist. He thinks the gasp was just the result of gases that had built up inside it. Aret-Hanutma seems to have died by being mummified alive. Jago spots a movement in the shadows, and one by one, Jago, Randall and then Litefoot are knocked out by an unseen assailant. When they come to, the mummy has vanished. Jago thinks it was the mummy that attacked them, and it has now escaped into the night!

Ellie puts Constance to bed; she seems feverish, delirious. Ellie notices she is holding the beetle amulet and refuses to let it go. Ellie then hears a sinister scuttling sound but can’t see its source...

She reports this back to Litefoot at the Red Tavern the next day. Jago fails to turn up because he has been kidnapped. He wakes up in a room resembling an Egyptian temple/pyramid interior, full of Egyptian relics. It turns out this is the cellar of the mansion of Hortense Delacroix, a flamboyant, wealthy widow (think Eleanor Bron/Frances De La Tour) fascinated by Egyptology and its related mysticism. She is assisted by her taciturn butler Mr Cecil. The vanished mummy is now the pride of her collection. Delacroix forces Jago to describe what happened after the sarcophagus was opened. When he mentions Constance fainting, Delacroix realises ‘We were too late! She must have already been chosen’. She asks Jago where Constance is, but Jago refuses to say. He is locked up with a young flower-seller kidnapped by Delacroix, Josie. Jago and Josie escape through a coal-hole. Jago sends Josie home to recover. (Note: Josie and Cecil are doubling-up characters of few lines.)

Meanwhile, Constance awakes. Randall talks to her but she no longer recognises him. Instead, she claims to be Aret-Hanutma! She remembers being mummified alive, after being given an ‘elixir’ to keep her in a state of living death, entombed with the amulet of Khepri (a relic of the gods) which would transfer her ‘essence’ into the nearest young woman when she was exhumed. That way, she would be resurrected and live forever. She goes for a walk with Randall and sees a little of late Victorian London, remarking on how different the world is from the one she left. An unconventional romance blossoms. (Note: the ‘possession’ is more like a dissociative identity disorder/fugue state.)

Jago reaches Litefoot and Ellie and tells them of his recent ordeal. Jago and Litefoot hurry to Constance’s house - unaware they are being followed by Delacroix and Cecil (who allowed Jago to escape precisely so that he would lead them to ‘the chosen one’). They arrive and are filled in regarding Aret-Hanutma and her possession of Constance’s body. She explains that she was mummified, thousands of years ago, by her cruel husband, during an uprising. He had a secret plan for them both to escape retribution by having their ‘essences’ resurrected in new bodies when the time came. But his mummy was destroyed and the plan was forgotten. But Delacroix must have discovered it, as part of her research into Egyptian relics/mysticism. She instructed Cecil to break into the Egyptian hall and steal the mummy, intending to transfer Aret-Hanutma’s ‘essence’ into Josie!

They are visited by Delacroix, escorted by Cecil. Delacroix explains that she was secretly funding Randall’s expedition because she wanted Aret-Hanutma found and resurrected – so she could rule once more. Delacroix is essentially Aret-Hanutma’s biggest fan, and wants a return to the glory days of the pharaohs. Aret-Hanutma has no wish to rule and explains that the amulet of Khepri gives her the power to summon familiar spirits in the shape of insects. She holds the amulet, opens her mouth, and a horde of locusts stream out and set upon Delacroix and Cecil. They flee. Aret-Hanutma tells our heroes that she wishes for her ‘essence’ to return to the mummy so Constance can have her body back. Aret-Hanutma has no wish to be immortal at another’s expense. She has enjoyed her day with Randall, but now her life must come to an end.

While Randall stays with Aret-Hanutma in Constance’s house, Jago leads Litefoot to Delacroix’s home to search for Aret-Hanutma’s mummy. When they get there, they discover it is deserted. Delacroix and Cecil must be elsewhere.

Delacroix and Cecil return to Constance’s house, this time with Ellie as their hostage. They force Aret-Hanutma and Randall to surrender.

Jago and Litefoot hide in the cellar-temple as Delacroix and Cecil return with their prisoners. They watch as Delacroix informs Aret-Hanutma she must do as she is told or she will be forced to make sacrifices in her honour – beginning with Ellie and Randall, who are placed on a special altar. Aret-Hanutma submits and summons a giant scarab as a sign of her obedience. Then she weakens and the beetle disappears. Delacroix instructs Cecil to place Aret-Hanutma in her ‘royal chamber’ to recover. After they have gone Delacroix orders Randall to destroy the mummified remains of Aret-Hanutma so her ‘essence’ can never return to it; but the mummy has disappeared!

The mummy has, in fact, been stolen by Jago and Litefoot. They manage to sneak in to see Aret-Hanutma and devise a plan between them. But will involve following some precise instructions.

A few minutes later, Delacroix enters the prison to find Jago and Litefoot with Aret-Hanutma, who is attempting to return to her mummified remains. But Delacroix interrupts the process. She has them taken back into her temple, along with the mummy. She orders Aret-Hanutma to summon the giant beetle again so that Jago and Litefoot can be sacrificed to it. She agrees and the beetle appears. But before it feeds Delacroix sets fire to the mummy so Aret-Hanutma can never return to her old body.

But it turns out that she had already returned to it! When she was with Jago and Litefoot she released Constance from her possession and put her ‘essence’ back in the mummy. Ever since, Constance has been pretending to be Aret-Hanutma prompted by Jago and Litefoot and following instructions left by Aret-Hanutma on how to summon the giant scarab using the amulet of Khepri.

As the mummy is burned, a terrible supernatural force is unleashed; the final vengeance of Aret-Hanutma. Rather than feeding on our heroes, the giant scarab turns on Delacroix and Cecil. Delacroix orders Constance to call the beetle off or she will kill Ellie and Randall, but she genuinely doesn’t know how to. The beetle devours Delacroix and Cecil and approaches Ellie and Randall. In the nick of time, Litefoot destroys the amulet and the scarab dissolves into a swarm of locusts and disappears.

With Constance herself again (with no memory of anything that happened while her body was occupied by Aret-Hanutma), she and Randall are reunited, and give Jago and Litefoot their thanks. They return to the Red Tavern, as they feel they probably owe Ellie a drink.

Tuesday, 26 February 2019

Spirits of Ancient Egypt

Okay, here’s something a bit different. A rejected outline for a Jago and Litefoot story from 2014. I can’t remember why it was rejected – I daresay you may come up with a few reasons, and they may probably be right. Anyway, after it was rejected I came up with The Year of the Bat which was better; a kind of glorious collision of four ideas at once (a time postbox, young Jago and Litefoot, vampire nannies and Wyld’s Great Globe doing James and the Giant Peach). That story is still available here, obligatory plug.


What I wanted to do was this story was to do a story based around the literature of Victorian Egyptomania. To avoid all the stuff in Pyramids of Mars but to combine/pastiche The Jewel of the Seven Stars,  Lot No 249 and The Beetle, with maybe a bit of the Frenzy of Tongs episode of Dr Terrible’s House of Horrible creeping in at the end. I think, on reflection, the pastiche was too ‘straight’ so my story lacked originality. But see what you think.

(Normally any stories I come up with which are rejected goes back into the 'ideas' folder in case I can repurpose them, but I don't think this one can be repurposed).

I did two versions. This is the first one, I’ll post the second one tomorrow.


JAGO & LITEFOOT

 THE CLAWS OF THE SCARAB”

Our heroes and Ellie attend an opening of a newly-found sarcophagus at the British Museum Archaeologist Randall Brooks Morton – a colleague of Flinders Petrie – is there with his fiancĂ©e Constance Drake. The sarcophagus is of a long-dead Egyptian Queen, Aret-Hanutma. As the mummy is unwrapped, it momentarily seems to spring to life, gasping for air. Constance faints of revulsion/shock. The mummy is clasping an amulet in the shape of a beetle. 

After the evening’s end, Constance is taken home by Ellie while Litefoot examines the mummy, in his capacity as a pathologist. He thinks the gasp was just the result of gases that had built up inside it. Aret-Hanutma seems to have died by being mummified alive. Jago spots a movement in the shadows, and one by one, Jago, Randall and then Litefoot are knocked out by an unseen assailant. When they come to, the mummy has vanished. Jago thinks it was the mummy that attacked them, and it has now escaped into the night!

Ellie puts Constance to bed; she seems feverish, delirious. Ellie notices she is holding the beetle amulet and refuses to let it go. Ellie then hears a sinister scuttling sound but can’t see its source...

She reports this back to Litefoot at the Red Tavern the next day. Jago fails to turn up because he has been kidnapped. He wakes up in an underground temple. The temple is home to the Cult of Khepri, led by Tarik Ahmed. At knifepoint, Tarik forces Jago to relate what happened after the sarcophagus was opened. When he mentions Constance fainting, Tarik realises ‘We were too late! She must have already been chosen’. He asks Jago where Constance is and Jago refuses to say. He is then locked up with a young girl kidnapped by the Cult, Josie. Jago and Josie manage to escape from their prison and make their way back to the surface. Jago sends Josie home to recover from her ordeal. 

Meanwhile, Constance awakes. Randall talks to her but she no longer recognises him. Instead, she claims to be Aret-Hanutma! She remembers being mummified alive, after being given an ‘elixir’ to keep her in a state of living death, entombed with the amulet of Khepri (a relic of the gods) which would transfer her ‘essence’ into the nearest young woman when she was exhumed. That way, she would be resurrected and live forever. She goes for a walk with Randall and sees a little of Victorian London, remarking on how different the world is from the one she left.

Jago reaches Litefoot and Ellie and tells them of his recent adventures. Jago and Litefoot hurry to Constance’s house - unaware they are being followed by Tarik and his fellow cult members (who allowed Jago to escape precisely so he would lead them to ‘the chosen one’). They arrive and are filled in regarding Aret-Hanutma and her possession Constance’s body. She explains that the Cult of Khepri were the ones who mummified her, thousands of years ago, forcing her to become immortal. When her mummified remains were taken to England by Randall, the Cult followed. Not in order to prevent the sarcophagus being opened, but to make sure there was a suitable ‘vessel’ for Aret-Hanutma’s spirit nearby when it was (i.e. Josie). They were the ones who broke into the Egyptian Hall and stole the mummy, but then they must have realised that it no longer contained Aret-Hanutma’s essence. Aret-Hanutma explains that the Cult of Khepri want her alive not so they can worship her, but so they can use her as a tame god and force her to do their will.

The house is besieged by Tarik and the Cult. Aret-Hanutma explains that the amulet of Khepri gives her the power to summon familiar spirits in the shape of insects. She holds the amulet, opens her mouth, and a horde of locusts stream out and set upon Tarik and the Cult. They flee in terror. Aret-Hanutma tells our heroes that she wishes for her essence to return to the mummy; that way, Constance can get her body back. Aret-Hanutma has no wish to be immortal at the expense of another’s life. 

While Randall stays with Aret-Hanutma in Constance’s house, Jago leads Litefoot to the temple. When they get there, they discover it is deserted. All the Cult must be elsewhere.

The Cult of Khepri turn up outside Constance’s house with Ellie as their hostage. They force Aret-Hanutma to surrender herself and Randall.

Jago and Litefoot hide in the temple as Tarik and the Cult return with their prisoners. They watch as Tarik informs Aret-Hanutma she must do as he commands, or they will be forced to make sacrifices in her honour – beginning with Ellie and Randall, who are placed on a special altar. Aret-Hanutma submits and summons a giant scarab as a sign of her obedience. Then she weakens and the beetle disappears. Tarik orders the Cult to place Aret-Hanutma in a special chamber to recover. After she has gone he orders his followers to destroy the mummified remains of Aret-Hanutma so her spirit can never return to it; but the mummy has disappeared!

The mummy has, in fact, been stolen by Jago and Litefoot. They manage to sneak in to see Aret-Hanutma and devise a plan between them. But it will involve following some precise instructions.

A few minutes later, Tarik enters the prison to find Jago and Litefoot with Aret-Hanutma who is attempting to return to her mummified remains. Tarik interrupts the process. He then has them taken back into the temple along with the mummy. He then tells Aret-Hanutma to summon the giant beetle again so that Jago and Litefoot can be sacrificed to it. She agrees and the beetle appears. But before it feeds, Tarik sets fire to the mummy so Aret-Hanutma can never return to her old body. 

But it turns out that she already returned to it. When she was with Jago and Litefoot she released Constance from her possession and put her essence back in the mummy. Ever since, Constance has been pretending to be Aret-Hanutma prompted by Jago and Litefoot and following instructions left by Aret-Hanutma on how to summon the giant scarab using the amulet of Khepri.

As the mummy is burned, a terrible supernatural force is unleashed; the final vengeance of Aret-Hanutma. Realising what is happening, the members of the Cult either flee or sacrifice themselves to the giant scarab. But rather than feeding on our heroes, the giant scarab turns on Tarik. He orders Constance to call the beetle off or he will kill Ellie and Randall but she genuinely doesn’t know how to. It devours Tarik and then approaches Ellie and Randall. In the nick of time, Litefoot destroys the amulet and the scarab dissolves into a swarm of locusts and disappears. 

With Constance herself again, she and Randall are reunited and give Jago and Litefoot their thanks. They return to the Red Tavern, as they owe Ellie a round of drinks...

Sunday, 17 February 2019

Mother Stands For Comfort

I’ve just been listening to my Missy story, The Belly of the Beast. I think it’s turned out rather well, so, as usual, it’s a mixture of pride and relief and having got away with it again.


I don’t think I’ve ever said where I got the idea for the story from. Well, back when I was doing a Doctor Who Magazine ‘Fact of Fiction’ on The Macra Terror, I remembered that noted critic and broadcaster Matthew Sweet was convinced – or at least had a theory – that Ian Stuart Black was inspired by the play The Cities and the Plain by Alex Comfort. Being a diligent researcher, I checked this out, but couldn’t really see any similarity beyond the fact that they both concerned miners. But when it came to coming up with The Belly of the Beast I thought back and wondered – what if Matthew had been right? What would a Doctor Who story based on The Cities and the Plain have been like? So that’s why there a couple of nods to The Macra Terror, in recognition of its origins. It would, however, be wrong to say The Macra Terror was an inspiration; it was more of an unspiration, as I was doing everything differently! But now there are two DoctorWho audios inspired by the work of Alex Comfort, so there’s a thing.


In other news, there’s now a cover for my forthcoming Black Archive book on The Dalek Invasion of Earth.

Amongst other things, it contains:
A detailed scene-by-scene look at Terry Nation's first draft!
A detailed scene-by-scene look at the camera script and its realisation on screen, including deleted scenes!
At last, after 55 years, an explanation for the episode title 'The Waking Ally'!
How The Dalek Invasion of Earth inspired Terry Nation’s series Survivors!
How Terrance Dicks wrote the novelisation!

And perhaps, most exciting of all:
Milton Subotsky's working draft of Daleks - Invasion Earth 2150 AD. An entirely different version of the story that has never been documented in Doctor Who Magazine or anywhere else... until now.

Thursday, 7 February 2019

Cactus


Three things.

First. Out today, there’s a new issue of DWM, featuring another of my Blogs of Doom. This time the blog is by Meglos, the antagonist of the widely-disputed classic story ‘Meglos’. How many shows could tell a story about a villainous potted cactus? He’s a prickly customer and no mistake.

Secondly. The first Missy boxset has also just been released. It contains three great stories and my very own effort, the conclusion of the four, called The Belly of the Beast. (It’s working title was The Mines of Terror, in tribute to the old BBC Micro computer game, but sanity prevailed). It’s a bit of a strange one, I think – it’s quite hard to write a story with a villain as the hero and not end up with a strange story. I’ve wittered on about it elsewhere so I won’t bore you with details, you can just order it here.


 Thirdly, there’s now a blurb for my forthcoming UNIT story, part of the Incursions box set, called This Sleep of Death. Here it is:

Abbey Marston. UNIT’s dark secret. A place where the laws of space and time, life and death, can be suspended. Where remembering the departed has consequences… When UNIT faces a threat from a dead man, Kate has no choice but to return to Abbey Marston once more, to disturb the sleep of death. But the Static are waiting…

It can be pre-ordered here.