This is a good example of the sort of boring, unnecessary explaining-stuff-that-doesn’t-need-explaining that should get cut:
PERI
In the second draft I added the scene with the two
maintenance workers being attacked by dogs, and then rewrote the following scene:
42C. INT.
MISSION CONTROL.
ALEXEI
ENTERS.
MIKHAIL
ALEXEI
The dogs had
dragged their bodies away, we don’t know where. I watched the whole thing on
the security cameras.
PERI
And you’re
sure Laika did this wait?
ALEXEI
Oh, yes. She
was leading the pack.
MIKHAIL
Can’t remember why I cut the next bit. Because I was told
to, I expect. Pity, I think it’s a nice little moment. It’s quite common for
stories to have bits where characters think somebody is dead but where there
isn’t time to explore their reaction. But, of course, it happens so often in Doctor Who that if someone got upset
every time they thought the Doctor had been killed they would be upset so often
it would become ridiculous.
PERI
No. I’ve thought him dead dozens of times
before, and he’s always turned up, out of the blue. Usually with a bad joke.
For the scene where the Doctor encounters the alien probe, I
was asked to give specific quotes of things we might hear rather than
generalisations:
FX: A BRIEF BURST OF COPYRIGHT-FREERANDOM
RADIO,
TELEVISION AND FILM CLIPS PRECEDING 1963. SPEECHES BY RAMSAY MACDONALD, LENIN,
KENNEDY, NEWSREELS AND MUSIC: JAZZ, CLASSICAL MUSIC AND EARLY ROCK’N’ROLL, CLASSICAL,
HYMNS. WEDDINGS, . CROWDS AT FOOTBALL MATCHES,
AUDIENCES LAUGHING AT GOONS.MIXED IN WITH:
RADIO
ANNOUNCER ONE:
- Finisterre and Biscay, winds moderate. Rockall,
gale warning.
RADIO ANNOUNCER
TWO:
And as Maurice Leyland steps up to the wicket -
And finally, I cut the final two lines from the story. Too soppy,
too corny, too on-the-nose. Ah well, you throw this stuff out there, some of it
sticks, some of it doesn’t.
DOCTOR
Not just mankind. No. It’s a message to the rest of the universe. After all, you never know who might be listening....
Not just mankind. No. It’s a message to the rest of the universe. After all, you never know who might be listening