The random witterings of Jonathan Morris, writer.

Wednesday, 27 February 2019

Walk Like An Egyptian

And now, the revised version of Jago and Litefoot: The Claws of the Scarab. As you will read, I completely changed the nature of the villains of the story. Is it better or worse? I don’t know. It still got rejected!

This version has all the changed bits in red, which is a thing that I do to be helpful to producers, so they don’t have to read the whole thing again.


JAGO & LITEFOOT

 THE CLAWS OF THE SCARAB”

Our heroes and Ellie attend an opening of a newly-found sarcophagus at the British Museum Archaeologist Randall Brooks Morton – a colleague of Flinders Petrie – is there with his fiancĂ©e Constance Drake. The sarcophagus is of a long-dead Egyptian Queen, Aret-Hanutma. As the mummy is unwrapped, it momentarily seems to spring to life, gasping for air. Constance faints of revulsion/shock. The mummy is clasping an amulet in the shape of a beetle.

After the evening’s end, Constance is taken home by Ellie while Litefoot examines the mummy, in his capacity as a pathologist. He thinks the gasp was just the result of gases that had built up inside it. Aret-Hanutma seems to have died by being mummified alive. Jago spots a movement in the shadows, and one by one, Jago, Randall and then Litefoot are knocked out by an unseen assailant. When they come to, the mummy has vanished. Jago thinks it was the mummy that attacked them, and it has now escaped into the night!

Ellie puts Constance to bed; she seems feverish, delirious. Ellie notices she is holding the beetle amulet and refuses to let it go. Ellie then hears a sinister scuttling sound but can’t see its source...

She reports this back to Litefoot at the Red Tavern the next day. Jago fails to turn up because he has been kidnapped. He wakes up in a room resembling an Egyptian temple/pyramid interior, full of Egyptian relics. It turns out this is the cellar of the mansion of Hortense Delacroix, a flamboyant, wealthy widow (think Eleanor Bron/Frances De La Tour) fascinated by Egyptology and its related mysticism. She is assisted by her taciturn butler Mr Cecil. The vanished mummy is now the pride of her collection. Delacroix forces Jago to describe what happened after the sarcophagus was opened. When he mentions Constance fainting, Delacroix realises ‘We were too late! She must have already been chosen’. She asks Jago where Constance is, but Jago refuses to say. He is locked up with a young flower-seller kidnapped by Delacroix, Josie. Jago and Josie escape through a coal-hole. Jago sends Josie home to recover. (Note: Josie and Cecil are doubling-up characters of few lines.)

Meanwhile, Constance awakes. Randall talks to her but she no longer recognises him. Instead, she claims to be Aret-Hanutma! She remembers being mummified alive, after being given an ‘elixir’ to keep her in a state of living death, entombed with the amulet of Khepri (a relic of the gods) which would transfer her ‘essence’ into the nearest young woman when she was exhumed. That way, she would be resurrected and live forever. She goes for a walk with Randall and sees a little of late Victorian London, remarking on how different the world is from the one she left. An unconventional romance blossoms. (Note: the ‘possession’ is more like a dissociative identity disorder/fugue state.)

Jago reaches Litefoot and Ellie and tells them of his recent ordeal. Jago and Litefoot hurry to Constance’s house - unaware they are being followed by Delacroix and Cecil (who allowed Jago to escape precisely so that he would lead them to ‘the chosen one’). They arrive and are filled in regarding Aret-Hanutma and her possession of Constance’s body. She explains that she was mummified, thousands of years ago, by her cruel husband, during an uprising. He had a secret plan for them both to escape retribution by having their ‘essences’ resurrected in new bodies when the time came. But his mummy was destroyed and the plan was forgotten. But Delacroix must have discovered it, as part of her research into Egyptian relics/mysticism. She instructed Cecil to break into the Egyptian hall and steal the mummy, intending to transfer Aret-Hanutma’s ‘essence’ into Josie!

They are visited by Delacroix, escorted by Cecil. Delacroix explains that she was secretly funding Randall’s expedition because she wanted Aret-Hanutma found and resurrected – so she could rule once more. Delacroix is essentially Aret-Hanutma’s biggest fan, and wants a return to the glory days of the pharaohs. Aret-Hanutma has no wish to rule and explains that the amulet of Khepri gives her the power to summon familiar spirits in the shape of insects. She holds the amulet, opens her mouth, and a horde of locusts stream out and set upon Delacroix and Cecil. They flee. Aret-Hanutma tells our heroes that she wishes for her ‘essence’ to return to the mummy so Constance can have her body back. Aret-Hanutma has no wish to be immortal at another’s expense. She has enjoyed her day with Randall, but now her life must come to an end.

While Randall stays with Aret-Hanutma in Constance’s house, Jago leads Litefoot to Delacroix’s home to search for Aret-Hanutma’s mummy. When they get there, they discover it is deserted. Delacroix and Cecil must be elsewhere.

Delacroix and Cecil return to Constance’s house, this time with Ellie as their hostage. They force Aret-Hanutma and Randall to surrender.

Jago and Litefoot hide in the cellar-temple as Delacroix and Cecil return with their prisoners. They watch as Delacroix informs Aret-Hanutma she must do as she is told or she will be forced to make sacrifices in her honour – beginning with Ellie and Randall, who are placed on a special altar. Aret-Hanutma submits and summons a giant scarab as a sign of her obedience. Then she weakens and the beetle disappears. Delacroix instructs Cecil to place Aret-Hanutma in her ‘royal chamber’ to recover. After they have gone Delacroix orders Randall to destroy the mummified remains of Aret-Hanutma so her ‘essence’ can never return to it; but the mummy has disappeared!

The mummy has, in fact, been stolen by Jago and Litefoot. They manage to sneak in to see Aret-Hanutma and devise a plan between them. But will involve following some precise instructions.

A few minutes later, Delacroix enters the prison to find Jago and Litefoot with Aret-Hanutma, who is attempting to return to her mummified remains. But Delacroix interrupts the process. She has them taken back into her temple, along with the mummy. She orders Aret-Hanutma to summon the giant beetle again so that Jago and Litefoot can be sacrificed to it. She agrees and the beetle appears. But before it feeds Delacroix sets fire to the mummy so Aret-Hanutma can never return to her old body.

But it turns out that she had already returned to it! When she was with Jago and Litefoot she released Constance from her possession and put her ‘essence’ back in the mummy. Ever since, Constance has been pretending to be Aret-Hanutma prompted by Jago and Litefoot and following instructions left by Aret-Hanutma on how to summon the giant scarab using the amulet of Khepri.

As the mummy is burned, a terrible supernatural force is unleashed; the final vengeance of Aret-Hanutma. Rather than feeding on our heroes, the giant scarab turns on Delacroix and Cecil. Delacroix orders Constance to call the beetle off or she will kill Ellie and Randall, but she genuinely doesn’t know how to. The beetle devours Delacroix and Cecil and approaches Ellie and Randall. In the nick of time, Litefoot destroys the amulet and the scarab dissolves into a swarm of locusts and disappears.

With Constance herself again (with no memory of anything that happened while her body was occupied by Aret-Hanutma), she and Randall are reunited, and give Jago and Litefoot their thanks. They return to the Red Tavern, as they feel they probably owe Ellie a drink.